Monday, December 18, 2006

The Unborn Child


Tired eyes wink
As stifled dreams blink
And muzzled foetus battles

Fragile uterine wall quivers
disturbed creature quibbles
as alien object approaches

Broken chords snap
Sprawled placenta hangs
Sacred Adam, rendered homeless

His Eden desecrated
Stripped of his innocence
Virginal nakedness revealed

With one last breath
He voicelessly cried
‘I wish I was born’

His death, her pride
Tender flames, snuffed too soon
Tender seed, never to sprout!







*Below are comments that I received on this poem when it was first published on allpoetry.com. I just thought you might want to read them.

Comments
1 - 8 of 8

Vickie J
July 23
You had me close to tears on this one. I know this is such a touchy issue in today's world-but for the life of me, I will never be able to agree that it is right to steal an innocent child's life from him/her while they are in a place that should be their safe haven. I've seen too many films showing abortions in the process to be told that they don't suffer. Their skin is so thin and fragile-raw nerves unprotected-tell me yanking them apart limb by limb doesn't hurt-tell them, "this hurts me more than it hurts you"-God forgive us for the sins against the unborn who are very much alive.

I applaud this outstanding and moving write~vj

babyalah
July 23
As much as I would have loved to have read this, I couldn't as it was starting to bring back those memories that I don't want. I know what it feels like to lose a child before life has started.
Welcome to the site
Dawn

galfalfa
July 23
A very sad powerful and well worded piece here ...suits your picture choice well. Thanks for entering our contest

galfalfa

Abscessed
July 24
Oh this was absolutely phenomenal and I completely agree with your train of thought! I thought you did just a wonderful job conveying across just an important message - and the way you worded this piece was absolutely touching and brilliant!
Thank you for following the rules and entering the contest
I wish you luck and welcome you to All Poetry!

abscessed


sunny day
July 26
Very well written!!!!!
This was a very powerful piece that raises the age old issue of prolife or prochoice. I don't like to be involved in that battle at all. You did a marvelous job with your take on this. Joyce

Sharcu
July 29
A very powerful poem that you expressed your views well. I too am a pro-life person and wonder why someone would ever want to abort such an innocent life. Well thought out poem! Good luck and welcome to AP
--Tim

Damselflydreams
August 14
This was both graphic and philosophical. Lots of amazing metaphors and references. Anchored in your message like the child anchored in the womb before being removed. Best of luck.
Rayne Maker

August 14
Your words are so powerful, and so dark. I love the metaphor you used in this poem. It's a great write.

3 comments:

sharon said...

Hey boo, I agree with some of the comments that the others had left. I too have lost a child in 1992 and I also can relate because I too had an abortion. You know I never looked at it in that perspective but had I ...I wouldnt have done it. Yes, my reasons for getting the abortions were to be released from being a part of the person that I was dealing with....such a poor reason for ending an innocent childs life. But it sure would not happen again.

shaveta said...

hey its nice to know another poet, i m also a poet and was searching an image for my blog, as i also wrote the poem unborn child, but mine is differnet obviously,nice to visit ur blog, nice poem...
shaveta

shaveta said...

hey its nice to know another poet, i m also a poet and was searching an image for my blog, as i also wrote the poem unborn child, but mine is differnet obviously,nice to visit ur blog, nice poem...
shaveta